Bronze-Dragonrider's poems

[Bronze-Dragonrider]

ok, after coercing from in chat, I'm posting some old poems I dug up from a year or so ago. This one I don't like entirely, the rhythm doesn't seem right...

Those Special Eyes Of Yours

There is something in those eyes of yours,
Something special that captivates me.
You catch my glance,
It turns into a gaze,
I can't help but stare.
Your eyes are a deep shade of azure,
Like the pinnacle of the blue sky.
Your eyes glisten beyond morning dew,
They sparkle more brilliantly than the stars.
There is something in there that fuels that shine,
Something that gives them that magic touch.
As I hold you in my arms,
And look into your eyes,
I know that there's something else in there,
That makes me want you.
I'm wracking my mind
To know that special ingredient in your eyes.
But when you take me,
And your lips touch mine,
I get one more look in those special eyes of yours.
Now I know what gives your eyes that additional flame -
It's love.
I want you to know that this special touch
Is also in my eyes toward you.

[Bronze-Dragonrider]

Now this one I do like. I wrote it after a visit to Vancouver Island (but I tossed in the dolphins just as artistic liscence ;) )


The Beach

As I step out on the beach
Gulls sing in the air
Sand warms my toes
And the breeze flows through my hair.

When the tide rolls in and out
And boats skim the waves
Crabs crawl in the sand
And make stones turn into caves.

When the sun is high above
And it warms all things
If you listen carefully
You hear dolphins sing.

When I spot lots of shells
And a whale in the deep
A dolphin wanders near
And splashes with a leap.

When I step into the frothy foam
And pebbles slip between my fingers
When I swim in the blue waters
My memory of the ocean lingers.

[NeouofPern]

You know I love them. :D

[Weyrwoman Kalina]

:applause: Very very nice Bronzie!!!!!

Got any more? :D

[Dragongirl]

You go Bronzie! Your right 'Those Special Eyes of yours' is abit out of rhyme but I still love it nonetheless!!

[Bronze-Dragonrider]

:applause: Very very nice Bronzie!!!!!

Got any more? :D
How did I miss this comment before? :eek: I don't have many other notable poems (that aren't too depressing to post), other than the ones I've written for you ;)

But after scounging through my old stuff I came across this... still kind of downtrodden, written during frustrating times. I'm just glad that I have you now that I can trust you to be open with :kiss:


If Only You Knew

Maybe if you knew me
knew the real me
you wouldn't try to change it
to what you want to see.
Maybe if I was different
I could show you who I am.
My life isn't all it seems to be
I'm not like all of them
So please just let me be me.
I'm not as crazy as I seem
Look a little closer
You don't know how my life has been.

[Bronze-Dragonrider]

You go Bronzie! Your right 'Those Special Eyes of yours' is abit out of rhyme but I still love it nonetheless!!
Thank you! :) I never intended it to rhyme, but to me it seems as if the flow is a bit choppy...

[Bronze-Dragonrider]

And this one I'm particularly proud of, that was a Willet page starting poem, inspider by the Spider-pit scene in King Kong :darkside:


The darkness chokes
the air stifles.
Eyes peer through the vines;
Survivors, grab your rifles!

The insects swarm
and close all around
they devour the flesh
with scarce a sound.

The leeches emerge
and their maws gape wide.
Whole men disappear
The offenders' fates they decide.

[McClance]

I actually thought "Special Eyes" was really good. The descriptions are incredible!

I also love the King Kong-inspired one. The gloomy setting is wonderfully delivered.

And I could sense the frustration you delivered in "If Only"

And the ryhme pattern in "The Beach" is good.


:)